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PostSubject: Suna Suna no Mi   Sat Oct 17, 2015 3:34 pm

b]Devil Fruit:Suna Suna no Mi  [/b]
BYOND Key:Alekai8
User:Desrih, Josh ()
Background:When he was a Six year old, he was regarded as a loner. When the village children went to play he was at home working out with the dumbells he got for his 10th birthday. This was because he used to see his father get beaten up for stealing to provide for their family and often his mother had to do jobs as adult entertainer to get food. One day his father stole from a marine and was executed for it. Aswell as that marine coming for him and his mother to lock them up but his mum hid him under a log because he was short and fit perfectly. He came out after two hours of hiding and went back to the village to see nothing but people standing around his burning house. The elder of the village said he found a fruit in the rubble and and packed it in a bag, he told Josh to go out and find a home because the marines are bound to come back once they find out they missed one. (How did this person get this fruit?)
Extra:He ate the fruit while travelling through the desert and nearly regurgitated on it's bad taste but got back up and notice the sand drawing to him like a magnet. (Anything else you want to tell us?)
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PostSubject: Re: Suna Suna no Mi   Sat Oct 17, 2015 6:22 pm

Set the template properly, as that's really important to give some relevance to your application and make people think you're actually determined to obtain this Devil Fruit.

Improve your background as well. It is good, I like how simple and understandable it is, but there are a few grammar mistakes. Also, try to make the reason a bit more legitimate, like for example, don't say the elder of the village just gave him the fruit, say he gave your character more supplies to sustain himself. Basically, think a bit more, perhaps make your background more constructive. Just develop. It's not hard, is it?

Take your time! And just edit the main post, instead of creating a new one.

EDIT: I'd also prefer you to add the new template with the "RP Example" requirement! If you don't want to, it's fine, but just because you made the application before I added in the new code.
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